some rewording

pages/privacy.wml

@@ -19,55 +19,42 @@ worldwide network of volunteers.
 
 <p>
 Given the nature of the OpenLDAP Project and particulars of how
-services it provides are managed, little to no privacy can or
-should be expected here.
+services it provides are managed, privacy cannot be offered and
+shall not be expected.
 
 <p>
 Except as explicitly stated herein, users of these services, as
-well as any other Internet service provided by the OpenLDAP Foundation
-and/or OpenLDAP Foundation, shall have no expectation of privacy
-in their communications with the OpenLDAP Foundation, the OpenLDAP
-Project and its volunteers and shall have no expectation of privacy
+well as any other services provided by the OpenLDAP Foundation
+and/or OpenLDAP Project, shall have no expectation of privacy in
+their communications with the OpenLDAP Foundation, the OpenLDAP
+Project and its volunteers, and shall have no expectation of privacy
 in communications via services provided the OpenLDAP Foundation
 and/or the OpenLDAP Project.
 
 <p>
-While the OpenLDAP Foundation staff, OpenLDAP Project and its
-volunteers, and users of the OpenLDAP provides services are generally
-expected to adhere to norms of Internet etiquette and professional
-conduct, failure to adhere to these norms shall not in itself be
-construed as counter to any portion of this statement regarding
-privacy at OpenLDAP.org.
+While staff, volunteers, and users are generally expected to adhere
+to norms of Internet etiquette and professional conduct, failure to
+adhere to these norms shall not in itself be construed as counter
+to any portion of this statement regarding privacy at OpenLDAP.org.
 
 <p>
 The OpenLDAP Project hosts a number of services, such as our mailing
 list system, in which a user is required to register to make use,
 or full use, of.  In all such systems to which a user registered
 to use, the user is identified by a user provided email address.
-The user is generally required by confirm they have access to the
-independently hosted mailbox identified by the email address by
-email exchange.  The user's email address is recorded a part of
-user information, is used to identify the user in the service and
-associated logs, and is used in providing the particular service
-to which the user has registered for (such as to provide copies of
-messages sent to a list to which the user has subscribed).
+An email exchange is generally to confirm the user is in direct
+control of the account associated with the email address.  The
+user's email address is recorded a part of user information, is
+used to identify the user in the service and associated logs, and
+is used in providing the particular service to which the user has
+registered to obtain (such as to provide copies of messages sent to
+a list to which the user has subscribed).
 
 <p>
 The email address identifying the registered user is typically
 published with any materials the user submits to the registered
 service to identify the submitter to other users.
 
-<p>
-Only by abstaining from submitting any materials to services requiring
-registration may a user prevent their registered email address from
-being disclosed to other users and the general public, however
-emails addresses of any registered or previously registered users
-are available to OpenLDAP Foundation staff and OpenLDAP Project
-volunteers.  As volunteers are not generally legally bound to
-maintain registered users' email addresses in confidence, users
-shall have no expectation of privacy with respected their registered
-email addresses.
-
 <p>
 In the event a user wishes to cease obtain a particular service
 that requires registration, the user may deregister from the service.
@@ -98,6 +85,15 @@ volunteers managing the project, which in turn may share them with
 others and/or forward the message to internal mailing lists, and by
 so doing, cause the email to be recorded in archives.
 
+<p>
+Our services commonly managed with the assistance of volunteers.
+Volunteers have access to user information, such as users' registered
+email addresses.  Volunteers are not generally bound by any legally
+enforcable agreemnt to keep user information, or any other information,
+in confidence.  As such, users of provided services are not offered,
+and shall expect, privacy of user information (or other information)
+they provide to these services.
+
 <p>
 This statement does not absolve anyone from their responsibilities
 and duties not to trample the rights of others.  This statement